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Night
Marion Wiesel, Elie Wiesel
Taking the Long Way Home
Julio-Alexi Genao
Tinman
Dani R.R. Hermit
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L.E. Franks
Silver Bullet (Falls Chance Ranch #4)
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Alex Woolfson, Adam DeKraker, Veronica Gandini
Not For Sale - Brenda Cothern It looked good. The blurb sounded right up my alley- Leo's undercover work, etc. and, well, kudos to the author for starting the craft so late. It's harder than it looks.

I REALLY liked the general plot/story idea- the human traffic angle, the forced 'undercover relationship, and if course, the m/m aspect:). I also liked the informative nature of the bdsm information.

Unfortunately, this book really just wasn't my thing. It's easy to nitpick stories in general, but I don't want to do that. I'll just list my top (hopefully constructive) concerns:
1) Head-hopping and quasi-head hopping. The frequent back and forth between the characters interrupted flow and confused me.
2) Over-explaining (rather than showing or providing proof). I prefer a bit more ambiguity, and allowing the reader to draw conclusions. Admittedly, this can be a fine line.
3) Sorry! But the editing and pacing. I know this was indy, and therefore the author probably didn't have access to an editor. Buuuutttt.... I'm pretty sure I paid full price(ish) for this, which builds a certain expectation. And, while it wasn't pervasive, there were enough errors to draw me out of my headspace. If at all possible, hopefully the author can gain access to an editor ( or a really good beta) in the future- if nothing else, as a learning experience.

So, this didn't work for me. I'll keep watching the author, though, as writing is an evolutionary thing.